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#1 thewitchypoo

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Posted 20 January 2005 - 04:19 PM

I've never had the courage to upload my music before, I still think it was probably a silly idea, but you only live once, if you're going to go, you may as well make an idiot of yourself before you run out of time!

I uploaded 3 songs to soundclick. I probably did it wrong too.
Well here's the URL http://www.soundclic...aellismusic.htm
Hope it works and if you don't like it, well it'll give someone out there something to laugh at!

I really should go to bed now as I think my eyes are melting!

(hugs)
Carla


PLEASE SKIP TO END OF THIS THREAD!

Edited by thewitchypoo, 08 March 2005 - 02:28 PM.


#2 Jiveturkey

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Posted 20 January 2005 - 05:06 PM

Love the sneeze at the start tongue.gif "oh God"

Listening now-Nervous Breakdown, not bad at all, guitar sounds slightly out of tune at times but not too bad. Nice, catchy chorus and decent chord progression. You're too harsh on your own singing, your far better than I am (that's a compliment).

I've got work in the morning so I'll catch the other two tomorrow. smile.gif

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 03:36 AM

good voice. cool.gif

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 05:29 AM

Hello thewitchypoo,

Awesome work, the vocals are the highlights in all of your works I think. The guitar is very good as well. You talked of making an idiot out of yourself, well, how about sending them off to a record company then? Your vocals are really very good. Try sending them off. You never know if they might pick you up or not, but, I'd try it anyway. Great work, keep on playin!

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 06:41 AM

QUOTE (spydrdude @ Jan 21 2005, 01:29 PM)
Hello thewitchypoo,

Awesome work, the vocals are the highlights in all of your works I think.  The guitar is very good as well.  You talked of making an idiot out of yourself, well, how about sending them off to a record company then?  Your vocals are really very good.  Try sending them off.  You never know if they might pick you up or not, but, I'd try it anyway.  Great work, keep on playin!


I'd work on the production first before sending them to a label. I'm not going to sit here and waste your time by saying it's ready for A&R ears cause it's not. But you are on your way.

Also most labels don't accept unsolicited material so again you would be wasting your time randomly sending off demos. There are a few good places to search for labels that are looking for artist/songs. Here are 2 great places:

http://www.taxi.com

http://www.sonicbids.com

Check out what the other artists are producing.

I like sonicbids cause that's a low cost promotion tool and the EPK (electronic press kit) is professional. Taxi is good as well but cost a little bit more.

Good luck. cool.gif

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 08:00 AM

I apologize for wasting time. It will not happen again after this post.

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 08:22 AM

QUOTE (spydrdude @ Jan 21 2005, 04:00 PM)
I apologize for wasting time.  It will not happen again after this post.


didn't mean you were wasting time. Just that she would be wasting her time randomly submitting demos to labels. I'm just trying to help her out. and maybe whoever else on here is reading this thread and contimplating doing what you suggested.

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 04:53 PM

Wow thanks for the positive feedback, I really thought
I'd get verbal abuse or something.
Don't panic guys I know its not up to record company
standards and it will take me a while to come even close to it.

Guitar probably goes out of tune a bit because I almost fell
off my chair while I was playing that song. I also need to get
some new strings on my accoustic.

Thanks for the encouragement though.
(hugs) all round!

I left the sneeze in on purpose, I thought it would add comedy value.

smile.gif
Carla

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Posted 21 January 2005 - 06:22 PM

I think it's quite cool - as said before your greatest strenght is by far your voice - but I think that with the right recording tools you could make a really good overall recording. All the songs are just based around chords - which is fair enough but I think it would add ot the songs if you looked to add a bit more texture to the guitar part - maybe some picking or something like that. Anyhow, it's a good effort and I enjoyed listening to them smile.gif

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Posted 22 January 2005 - 03:43 AM

You are brave. From my experience it's always hard posting your work for critique. It never gets any easier. A harsh negative critique is like a punch to the stomach. But it's all good cause it makes your drive to succeed even stronger.

Good luck. cool.gif

Btw you look like Avril in your avatar. blink.gif

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Posted 22 January 2005 - 10:45 AM

QUOTE (nightnday @ Jan 22 2005, 06:43 AM)
Btw you look like Avril in your avatar. blink.gif

Holy s###, I better change it then!
I'm old enough to be her mother!

Thanks for the pointers, it helps when someone says
"Try this" or "Leave out that!"

I don't take it to heart, My strength lies in my artwork
(painting, drawing) so I see my music as an outlet for my emotions.
I'm too old to get anywhere with my music but maybe a
younger girl could sing these songs and someone with a bit more
skill could play them.

Edited by thewitchypoo, 22 January 2005 - 10:45 AM.


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Posted 22 January 2005 - 04:51 PM

You can all stop screaming now,
I changed my avatar hehehe.

On the website for soundclick, is that limit on there
10mb total or is that per song?

It's not a very easy site to navigate is it?

Carla

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Posted 22 January 2005 - 06:39 PM

Ok that sneeze was kindda funny......hahaha.........ok back to the song.........ncie strumming pattern there.........though its a lil too hissy Id say.....u shoudl defiantely clean up teh mix..adn bring teh Vox up more in teh mix........!!!!......teh song is not bad but it needs more .liek change the Chord progression or sturrmin pattern..........coz otehrwise it ets really boring.jsut liek all teh other acaoitsc singer/songwrier cats out tehre............u need dynamcis to stand out.......Keep rockin though......!!!.....PEAC EOUT
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Posted 23 January 2005 - 03:43 PM

QUOTE (waz416 @ Jan 22 2005, 09:39 PM)
Ok that sneeze was kindda funny......hahaha.........ok back to the song.........ncie strumming pattern there.........though its a lil too hissy Id say.....u shoudl defiantely clean up teh mix..adn bring teh Vox up more in teh mix........!!!!......teh song is not bad but it needs more .liek change the Chord progression or sturrmin pattern..........coz otehrwise it ets really boring.jsut liek all teh other acaoitsc singer/songwrier cats out tehre............u need dynamcis to stand out.......Keep rockin though......!!!.....PEAC EOUT

Yeah there's not a lot I can do with the equipment
I have right now, although someone has just leant
me a four track recorder.
I haven't figured out how to work the damn thing yet.
It has the name TASCAM on the top, Any ideas?

Help I'm lost when I have to plug stuff in!

Edited by thewitchypoo, 23 January 2005 - 03:44 PM.


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Posted 23 January 2005 - 04:58 PM

Just plug into whichever of the four tracks you want to record on first (inputs should be just positioned on the front), set your volume and pan the sound how you want it and hit record. Plug into another track and play the other one back etc

Yep I think it's 10mb per song. Any problems just post them on here, someone can usually help.

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Posted 25 January 2005 - 02:41 PM

QUOTE (Jiveturkey @ Jan 23 2005, 07:58 PM)
Just plug into whichever of the four tracks you want to record on first (inputs should be just positioned on the front), set your volume and pan the sound how you want it and hit record.  Plug into another track and play the other one back etc

Yep I think it's 10mb per song.  Any problems just post them on here, someone can usually help.

Aww you guys are great, thanks for the help.
I'll let you know how it all goes.
(((hugs)))
Carla

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Posted 07 March 2005 - 09:06 AM

I've added another song to soundclick,
I still can't get the 4 track recorder to work so untill I
can afford suitable software for my PC I'll have to stick
to using the sound recorder.

I'm now using a different microphone that grips the
guitar, it gets in the way when playing but I try to
work round it.

HUGS all round
Carla

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Posted 09 March 2005 - 06:22 AM

Okay, I'm bored enough, so I'll listen to them all! ohmy.gif

The end of home
A lot of hiss, but I'll listen past it. I actually like your voice, don't be so humble, it's good. It reminds me of... something... somethings 80s... Cocteau Twins ? Dunno, but it's soothing on this song. I haven't got a clue what you're actually saying, though. Until I saw the lyrics sheet, that is. smile.gif

Mental cruelty
I can see this song working in the minimalist setting as it is in now, maybe with piano instead of a guitar. Just chords and a vocal line, I think. The vocals are a bit sketchy at times, but like you mentioned, you meant for someone else to sing them. Get the right person and this should work fine.
Kind of like a Kate Bush ballad.

Nervous breakdown
Hm, I don't know what is is, but I don't really feel anything with this song. It doesn't really strike me, that's all.

Look away
I like the chord bridging the verse into the chorus. I read the accompanying story behind the lyrics and I think you pulled it off nicely, i.e.: using 'emo-lyrics' without sounding overly pompous or miserable. Check the songwriting forum on these boards to get proper reviews of your lyrics, I'm not really qualified on giving feedback on those.

Igorski out.

Edited by igorski, 09 March 2005 - 06:23 AM.


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Posted 09 March 2005 - 02:16 PM

Wow thanks for all that info, it helps getting positive
and negative feedback.
Yes my voice is getting a bit ropey these days.

By the way, what's emo?
I hear a lot of people say it but I don't fully
understand it, I thought it was a style of clothing.
I'm 35 so not quite with the teen vocabulary anymore.

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Posted 09 March 2005 - 11:41 PM

Just my oppinion but

if your going to put your stuff for people to critique you should at least take the time to tune your guitar...it's painful for me to listen to your songs

guitar playing isn't spectacular especially your pick hand attack

some things to work on would be

consistancy of attack, dynamics, and overall proper tuning

remember that presentation is everything

your vocals were pretty good...i think you have a very good voice and need to let it shine...sing louder and really let the listener hear what you have to say

i realize some of this is the limitations of your recordings but take some time on the details and raise the bar on those vocals


presentaton and details


remember this is just my opinion on how to improve take it lightly please



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