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[michael_stipe]

the key to this song is the cross-over melodies at the chorus and chorus2/outro thing, which i recorded with my primitive tape recorder (lack of money) by recording one onto one tape, then playing it and singing whilst recording onto another... genius, no?

DARKNESS HAS FALLEN - Bruce Springsteen meets Ryan Adams

..................C.......................F
Another thoughtless delayed remark
..........C.............F
I'll never sleep tonight
G.......................................F
Will I be the serpent or the fool?
G...............................F
Over-conscious, too aware of pointless rules

Chorus, Voice 1:
C......................F
I've taken too long
G.............................C
You've turned your back
Am..................F
Now I'm still stood here
G..............F
With the ashes of a dream
C.....................F
A second life line
G.........................C
A moment in the past
Am........F
Is all I need
G....F
But its all too much
C........F
And I give up
...........G
I give up
..........F.....................C
I give up and fade away
.................F
And I give up
...........G
I give up
..........F.....................C
I give up and fade away

Chorus, Voice 2:
.....C....................F
I know what you are,
..............................G.....C
and where you're going to
Am...........F
Wait for a call
.........................G
A mere acknowledgement
F
That I am here/Of my presence, which?
C.............F
All that I ask
..........G...........C
For I dare not dream
.........Am............F
I was taking the road
..........G.......F
When you stole my eyes
C...........F................G.............F
I can't escape this monotony now
C....................F..........G
Wait for the darkness
........F...............C
To cover the world

............................C...............................F
And now there's darkness on the distant hills
...............C........................F
Another street light flickers on
.........G................................F
I've got to wait out here and hide
.........G...................................F
Than risk a chance encounter with your eyes

Chorus

Chorus 2/Outro:
Voice 1:
C..........Em................F.........G
Why can't I take my own advice
.........Em....F.......G
Give you up before I begin
C..............Em..........F..............................G
Desire plagues my head in every waking night
............C...............Em..F....G.....C
Now darkness has fallen on me

Voice 2:
C..............Em..............F
Step, and I step, and I step
G
Closer to you
C.................Em................F
Check, and I check, and I check
................G
That I'm still out of view
C...............Em.............F
Hide, and I hide, and I hide
G
Thinking you'll turn
C...................Em..........F
Now that darkness has fallen
C..............C
I can't return

comments whatever
lk

[randomorwhat]

Some nice lyrics, but at time a little psudo-transient or philosophical. What I mean to say is you could simplify it and make it more effective in parts I reckon.
The only reason I believe that is because about half way through I became a little bit disconnected. Nevertheless, some nice work as ever Mike
Simon

[rabid_fox]

Strikes me as somewhat weak. It took a while to realise this on account of your cunning use of chords to space it out and make it seem a lot longer than it is, but all in all, you're just not using the language well here. You work in strangely pointless counter-points and by the time I finished reading it I was fed up with having to readjust after every line. It works in couplets, there's no full song here in my opinion. I don't like it.

[dorio]

The middle path. Honestly, i can't claim that i've enjoyed it all, but at the
same time, i can't say i didnt. It can be interpreted in several ways, and mine would be per se as you've written it. I don't try to imagine vampires or
supernatural stuff. Just plain. Like the chords.

[_brad_]

yeah some parts are dark and mysterious while others are weak and simple it doesnt match up, i would get my ideas straight before fixing this song



BTW

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ok fair enough
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 Have you heard about the Irishman who reversed into a car boot sale and sold the engine?    says:
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 Have you heard about the Irishman who reversed into a car boot sale and sold the engine?    says:
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 Have you heard about the Irishman who reversed into a car boot sale and sold the engine?    says:
ok

how cool is that convo with a girl called jennifer

[michael_stipe]

Fair enough, fair enough... I'd be fighting a losing battle with this one.
For the most-part I agree, mostly *Structure* has cursed it, me being forced to make every line of equal length so that the harmonics of it work out
Not a song for lyrics I realise, nevermind

Thanks for all the comments
lk

[little26]

i actually quite liked it. i mean i didnt like the verses, i got the feeling it wasnt what you wanted to write, but something that you merely wrote and found your words falling short of doing what you felt/thought justice. i did like however the first chorus thing 'i give up' i think if it was done really softly, atmospheric, minimal, kinda thom yorkey, itd sound really intense but not too blunt. the same with the second voice bit and the little bit before that. i thought those bits would work really well in a kinda self-involved sort of folky chanty mantra thing. i thought thats could work. this isnt awful in my opinion, some moments where it shines others which serve to make the good bits seem even better. good effort. i still think theres a little bit of honesty missing maybe.

[michael_stipe]

yeah you got it right about the mantra
at least one voice in each is a sort of very even-syllabled melody chant